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    dots Submission Name: My Valentinedots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMy Valentinedots
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    My Valentine has hollow eyes;
    Once bit, twice shy.
    A mannequin of her former self,
    Her porcelain soul upon a shelf.
    Boyfriend demon of her past,
    Left her heart with an impression that will last.
    A woman afraid to commit,
    A timid and awkward misfit.
    Tattered appearance tender underneath,
    To my heart it’s thief.
    Paper heart surrounded by lace;
    My heart surrounded by her face.
    She only knows her past torture,
    She’ll soon realize I am the flicking flame of a brighter future.




    Submitted on 2004-01-21 23:04:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      rhyming is alittle awkward, or so this is just my opinion, i believe you can do alot better if you focused on emotions just a tad more. this is just an thought though, although i do kinda like it like this. sry if i was no help
    | Posted on 2004-01-22 00:00:00 | by Trystam | [ Reply to This ]


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