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    dots Submission Name: Spring Breaksdots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSpring Breaksdots
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    Spring breaks out its too long stored songs.
    Starlings start the singing, a love poor turtledove
    coos the counterpoint as a mocking bird mugs his solo
    and ragged remnants of rain drip rhythm.
    The fairy dancers remain unseen except for
    a few blades of bent grass and disembodied laughs.




    Submitted on 2006-04-14 20:40:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It seem like you wrote a little diddy here. It was catchy and fun to say out loud. Brief but sweet. Nice work again. This was very good.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-04-22 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Great poem!! Is there more? It seems unfinished. I've read alot of your poems and I realy enjoy them. It's so nice to here from a mature voice. You writing is very profecional.

    Wildflower
    | Posted on 2006-07-15 00:00:00 | by wildflower | [ Reply to This ]
      this is delightful, Chrystine.. i love the way you made spring a song breaking out with birds singing and rain providing rhythm. of course i do believe in faeries, so i loved the reference to the bent blades of grass and "disembodied laughs." i once went to a place called "The Faerie Rings" at the Russian River in California. it's deep in the forest where there are huge trees in rings.. i swear i saw a few faeries that night.... honest!!

    this made me want to go out and skip through the grass with them, but it's mighty cold tonight!!

    peace and a blessed Easter weekend,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this. It has that classic feel to it, bare, yet so substantial. You say more these six lines than someone could write in a novel. I really enjoy your voice and your perspective. It seems as though you're giving the reader insight into things they would normally miss and I can't help but appreciate it.
    | Posted on 2006-04-15 00:00:00 | by roycureton | [ Reply to This ]


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