What this poem does best is create atmosphere. It feel like there's not really any one concrete meaning that I have to figure out, but more like words are being dropped into some dusty corner of my brain and they all fit together in some way that I should understand, but can't quite manage to.
I feel like the purpose of this is maybe not to create a full watercolor of a poem, but to mix together words to produce just one splendid color. Blue, maybe, as the title suggests.
Like the total disregard for sentences. you pretty much lost everyone who read it, that is good. I think this is to lead readers well nigh confusion. As I believe there was much confusion in the mind of the author in the writing.
ok, most of the words got together and make sense, but some of it i didn't get how it was together with the other words. for instance, the part with "A, lamb" I don't get how that goes along with it. and on the part with "Fusion dragon smile" I don't get how that goes alone with the rest of the poem. But besides that, the poem was really good with a lot in it. with a little words, you just desribed, (to me) all about death and dying, and that was really good. ok, im done now. bye.
it reminds me of dragons i like them they are pretty espically the one you drew on your wall it was lovely you must post it oh yeah back to the poem it was beautiful i understand it 100% it is so sentimental
Hey, I know this is like a late comment but I really liked this poem mainly because it's completely different from anything I read. I read your poem over and over and finally, I got it! I see that there is a pattern with all 3 words that are grouped as though it were stages of a cycle. "Blue. Blur. Blind"
I think that "blue" is not only a colour but a vision that you once had as though you are saying you had the capability of seeing. Blur is the second stage of your capabilities lacking is actually seeing and blind is the final stage which shows you are incapable of seeing as you once did from blue (obviously).
"Death Died A lamb."
Again another stage because it's through death that you are said to have "died" making it the first stage whereas "died" is second and to me, I interpret " A lamb" with that of a carefree soul..as though you are finally free. Almost like you are finally alive and you can finally "live" the way you wanted to.
Red. Moon. Rain.
Almost like "dawn" (or "sunset"), night, rain...like a rebirth of a constant day.
Fusion. Dragon. Smile.
Like all of your problems caused you to be reborn a powerful person that you've always wanted to be in life and always wanted to show, yet you kept it inside all this time, and you smile from that achievement of finally letting it out in success.
Hope Lost Dream
Someone's hopes can take away a person's perception of reality making it a lost cause into a vivid dream... A sanctuary for all hopes to live and achieve.
Sleep Hibernate Forever
Through dreams is sleep and from the way the poem is written, it almost sounds like you are taking context from a dream and putting it into life by wording it in such a slow fashion..like your mind is there, but then again it's not because it's a dream...all of this is a dream...and that's established by the ongoing zzzzz's at the end of the poem..
Wow..! lol I got it now! This poem was fun! I will read more now since I'm like overwhelmed with astonishment lol. Keep it real like you do =P
OK I'm lost. It sounds kind of neat but I don't get some of the associations you make. There's something about the one word lines that I like.. They keep it abstract and quick..
ammm you get me with this ...I really can't understand what you mean ..but oh my gad it's so organelle ..you maybe become known poet if you keep in that stll and give the reader some thing they can raelly understand !
Reminds me of a snake in appearance and maybe even in content. Sometimes hard to grasp, maybe deadly. Pieces of a dream, perhaps, not enough to weave together without additional imagination to be supplied by the reader. I would recognize it as art and could maybe even put it on a canvas.
It speaks of finality, and the red moon and dragon are ominous symbols while the small lamb speaks of helplessness in the face of death. This at least to me. Much more could be read into it by me and others. Yes, depressing.
Be cheered, however, that while a dark shade may be used to symbolize a depressed state, a lighter shade of blue is also the beautiful color of the heavenly sky. It doesn't take much of a shift. Maybe the dragon is Satan (common enough) and the lamb is Jesus (often referred). The difference being that the lamb arises after three days. That story has a happy ending if you believe it's true. Good work either way.
yo man, I gots to tell you, aint your best. It's alright, but i had to read a couple times to get the right feel. I'd post this as a prose, tha'ts waht it felt like to me. not ssure what you could do to improve it, but it aint terrible. But i gots to go. Now I got 2 Reapers reading, and liking my shyt, I wonder if that's a sign of some sorts, anyways bye now
Iagree. Yhis one does make me feel high..... has in majorly hyper . . . like how I get when I drinkn a tone os s o o o o o o o d d a a a !!!! < That word looked hyper. Whoah. Whatev. Good Job. No time to talk. Peace.
Submission Name: Blue
