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    dots Submission Name: One Linersdots

    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Love is a rising sun, large on the horizon, but hotter in mid-course.

    Love is the broth that heals a coughing heart.

    The heart is a blossomed bud releasing a call for the hairy legs of bees to stir and mingle its pollen.

    Passion is a ninety proof distilled spirit of love.

    Joy is the popping of life's corn.

    Submitted on 2006-04-15 12:53:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very sweet and uplifting. Cute and witty. I just want to copy this and tape the words on my office walls to remind me to smile. Nicely done lady.

    | Posted on 2006-04-22 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Chrys, I like these, and I might print them out, and put them on my wall, for a touch of inspiration. Very unique on your part, and like magnicat, I love the bees. Makes me laugh. Great job! Keep living the dream!
    | Posted on 2006-04-21 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
    This write is very vivid
    This really carries a lot of imagery
    I like the line about the hairy legs of a bee
    That line is extremely creative
    You always open up my mind to new ideas with your writes
    Thank You for that
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-04-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      nice little love one-liners Chrystine. makes me want to think of some of my own. i liked the reference to the 90-proof distilled spirit. i once wrote something about falling into "your 100-proof tantaleyes.."

    your last one, i thought you'd made a typo as i read "popping of life's cork" but using "corn" is great and not cliché like the cork..

    i was tickled by the hair legs of the bee, how unique!!

    write on, poetlady!

    | Posted on 2006-04-15 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      These are going on my fridge. Would you believe, these are the kind of things that keep me sane.

    Thank you so much for that, and the great write too.
    | Posted on 2006-07-22 00:00:00 | by junemarie | [ Reply to This ]

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