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    dots Submission Name: I'm In Dangerdots
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    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.86 - 399/443/123
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Lyrics/The pain inside
    Total Views: 231
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1316



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    dotsI'm In Dangerdots
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    verse 1~
    have you ever felt so alone
    surrounded by familiar faces
    but yet no ones home
    nothing can ease the hurt inside
    hiding behind nothing but lies
    that everyone can see right through

    chorus~
    they all see the danger i'm in
    but no one will come to my rescue
    they see the tears in my eyes
    as i'm holding on for my dear life
    with no one standing by my side
    i'm going outta my mind

    verse 2~
    have you ever had to turn away
    from everything that you know
    everything that's familiar
    life is against you, no where to hide
    and you're left standing naked
    in front of ones you called your friends

    chorus~

    verse 3~
    have you ever screamed so loud
    so everyone hears your hurt
    but no one stops to listen
    how could you be so cruel to me
    i gave you my beatin' heart
    i gave you my everything

    chorus x2~

    coda~
    have you ever given up hope
    to find the comfort
    to help ease all the pain
    you know i'm going insane
    i'm going outta my mind
    i've living life on the edge
    i'm in danger




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      Wow, verry emotional. I can relate to this peice and I hope things change. I've seen you do better on flow and things though of course I'm sure it would sound great with music but I think the messege in this speaks louder than it would in perfect rythem. Good write.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2006-06-03 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]



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