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    dots Submission Name: My Scarsdots
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    Author: MascaraTears69
    ASL Info:    14/f/cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 15/11/7
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 734
    Average Vote:    4.3333
    Bytes: 1401



    Description:
       Just a poem about cutting again. Comments would be nice...


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    dotsMy Scarsdots
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    My scars are too deep to ever heal.
    With pain that I refuse to reveal.
    All my life left alone in the dark.
    My scars leave the deepest mark.

    My scars still haunt me in the night.
    Lost in the dark without any light.
    And this life is too much of a fee.
    My scars left me too blinded to see.

    My scars are too much to bare.
    Back and fourth, here and there.
    The razor digs hard into my skin.
    My scars are proof of human sin.

    My scars have a story to be told.
    Those little secrets of mine unfold.
    Memories awaken from the past.
    My scars are bloody, bleeding fast.

    My scars are a replacement for tears.
    Feelings I've kept for many years.
    That show I am not here anymore.
    My scars leave me lying on the floor.

    My scars help me,screaming inside.
    The burning pain I cannot hide.
    Cuts and bruises do make it worse.
    My scars are proof I am cursed.

    My scars are the anger in my face.
    Feeling nothing but empty space.
    The pain takes over without a word.
    My scars are screams that are unheard.

    My scars portray a burning pain.
    A silent walk down memory lane.
    Where I can feel all the blood shed.
    My scars are proof I should be dead.




    Submitted on 2006-04-15 16:46:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked the rhyming and flow a lot. It's got the emotions as I read it. I felt the pain which reminded me of mine. Descriptions were nice. The ending has an impact. Although I'm not into cutting, stuff like that, I really liked it and I'm adding it. Hehe. Take care.
    | Posted on 2006-04-15 00:00:00 | by raineces | [ Reply to This ]
      I truly did love this poem...I can relate to it a lot..its sad though...everyone deserves to live..happy...but were not..And i guess that sux...and cutting is pretty the worst addiction..The ending of this poem hit me hard..It sorta made me think, why am I alive..?..whats the point of livng....And is there another way to live?..'cuz its the only way to die...so maybe people live to die..and suicide is just a quick route to happiness...i don't know..any who this piece had a lot of meaning and the flow was great!..Its something i think a lot of people can relate to ...and hopefully stop cutting..although its hard as hell to stop...anyhow good luck with your future rights..you've got a hell of a talent my dear!..laters! (hope you stop cutting soon..much love ^_^)

    Lucy
    | Posted on 2006-04-16 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]
      i can relate to it so much i mean like it almost made me cry cause it brought back memories i stored away but i mean i am inlove w/ it i hope u keep up the good work
    ~jessy~
    | Posted on 2006-04-18 00:00:00 | by WhErEaMi | [ Reply to This ]


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