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    dots Submission Name: A Bitter Draughtdots
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    Author: Angel-of-Avalon
    ASL Info:    18/F/hell
    Elite Ratio:    4.72 - 7/6/5
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I wrote this for my mom.


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    dotsA Bitter Draughtdots
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    It is a bitter draught I drink
    I taste the salt of all my tears
    I've grown accustomed to the taste
    The sour sting of arsenic words
    You throw without a second thought,
    In your anger...your distress
    I can hardly blame you.

    It is a bitter draught I drink
    The knowledge of my years of pain
    Caused by you turns my stomach
    Yet, in my greed, I swallow and drink again
    From the well of tears that I retain
    And your bitter words
    Like scraps of bread to the homeless
    Feeds my hungry soul
    You say I'm a dissappointment...
    And I can hardly blame you.

    It is a bitter draught I drink
    But if you were to take a sip
    I guarantee you couldn't handle it
    You'd spit it out, right in my face
    Just as you always do...
    And I can hardly blame you.




    Submitted on 2006-04-15 17:23:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great poem! I love the choice of words and especially the main metaphore about the bitter draught. Pain and shedding tears were described over and over again in many poems, but yours is very original. The repulse and pity you feel for your mother for the same time are combined and expressed very well.
    I especially liked the last stanza:
    It is a bitter draught I drink
    But if you were to take a sip
    I guarantee you couldn't handle it
    You'd spit it out, right in my face
    Just as you always do...
    And I can hardly blame you'
    The ending is perfect for this poem, in the same tone with what you said.
    I'm sorry you have such a relationship with your mother. Chin up, problems will clear out eventually.
    Have a nice depression-free day.
    -Angie-
    | Posted on 2006-04-16 00:00:00 | by Angie444 | [ Reply to This ]



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