Description: This collection of poems are what Ive wrote over the past months. The spaces begin a new poem. I hope Ive really hit the spot on my life. Anyways, I want comments or w Thank-you.
My Confessions -------------------------------------------
The Word Love
Everyone has his or her definition of love.
Whether you like it or not everyone’s definition is different.
You may disagree but deep inside you know that what they are saying is true.
How
How will I know what you are feeling if u won’t show me?
How will I know what you are trying to say if u won’t say it?
How do you know what to do if you aren’t sure what you want to do? How can I understand you if everything you are saying is confusing? How can you lie to me if you know that you are lying?
Do You Really Mean What You Say
When you say that I’m the one you want to be with are you telling the truth or are you just telling me what you think I want to hear.
When you say that you will never leave me are you telling the truth or are you just telling me what you think I want to hear.
When you say that when I’m down you’ll be there to pick me up are you telling the truth or are you just telling me what you think I want to hear.
When you say that you can’t live your life without me are you telling the truth or are you just telling me what you think I want to hear.
Cute poems. I liked the first one, it makes a nice kind of quote about love. I agree with the fact that people search in vain a way to define love, it's just something that you feel, and it's different for every person. The second and the third poem, on the other hand, have a rough flow and the third one is very repetitive and that's disturbing for the reader. Try editing it as a poem in a stanza form and make "Are you just telling me what I want to hear" the last line. You repeat it too much this way. Same goes for the second one. Try to concentrate what you want to say in fewer and in a larger variety of words. It's very clear you were very angry and confused. I can relate to everything you say, because it's the simple and unsophisticated truth. Sorry if I seem harsh, we're supposed to be sincere. I'm gonna shut up now just in case. And if you have the time please check out some of my work. Lotsa love. -Angie-
This seems like you are just talking to me. If there's a sense of conversation between reader and poet, that can be an advantage sometimes. Other times it can seem too informal and remove credibility of the poem. Try to "show" what you want to convey instead of "tell." :) That'll make it sound like less of a journal entry. Have a good day!
Submission Name: My Confessions
