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Repetitive Conversations


Author: Day DreaMeR
ASL Info:    19/F/somewhere
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the first thing I've written in a couple of months. So just let me know what you think but please don't get too critical I just need some thoughts and ideas but who knows cause I never usually edit or re-write my stuff anyways...


Repetitive Conversations



Repetitive words
Leave his mouth
Filling her head
Resulting with annoyance
Hearing these words used to be easy
But now
Hearing them is the hardest thing

This leaves her choked up
With the same words
That she keeps sending back to him
He doesn't understand
Eventually
She wants to drown him with her words
In hopes he will understand

Patience lessens
And frustration grows
As these repetitive conversations continue




Submitted on 2006-04-15 21:47:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Ok for some reason I understand this completely and I can really relate to what's going on. I understand why you used that title and it fits perfectly. Overall I like it and I really wouldn't change anything. Anyways good job.
| Posted on 2007-12-22 00:00:00 | by Burning_Heart | [ Reply to This ]
  This sounds like being married,
I really liked the choppy (maybe not the right word) style of this poem, it reminds me of the style that I have backed into.
The situation is more common than not, men and women are sooooo different,
Great write,
Spin
| Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by Spin | [ Reply to This ]
  Yeah it was a good writing of you, i loved the words you use to do this, and how i feel i can continue this writing time after time, and admiring it, good imaginary, and thanks for sharing, and if you have time please take a look to my writings, and good to see you again,
take care
and have a nice day
peace and love
Victor
| Posted on 2007-09-16 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
  I probably dont understand this as well as I think I do. First let me say it's good, it really takes me back to some bad things Ive had in the past, it makes me remember how some of those conversations went where youre trying to pour so much feeling into what youre saying but it just comes out as a [censored]in tidal wave of words. But I also see this as striking every person differently, and you could have been writing from a completely different experience.
Doesnt matter, I still liked it.

later
| Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by MC white | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow lover...that is really godd, and I;m not just saying that. I can totally relate to how you were feeling when you wrote that...You are a much better writer than you give yourself credit for. I mean...just....WOW!!! It really is good. I love you honey bunches...
| Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by redeemer | [ Reply to This ]
  Well i really dont know what these repetative conversations are referring to so ill put my own spin to it. well i had a girlfriend that i really cared for really love and wanted to make my own for life might sound crazy coming from someone thats only 18 but i dont put an age on love right and me and her everyday we talked for atleast 5 hours. I enjoyed every second i got to talk or see her and she told me so much baby i love you ill never let you go onestly (coming from a 23 yeard old woman with a child that went through an abusive relationship) that meant alot to me knowing that she trust me and allowed me to comfort her and i believed every word she said. She did things that annoyed me like she left for weeks at a time but i would always forgive her cause love made me blind and stupid and no matter what she kept sayin those words and instead of me loving to hear her it just became words not feelings anymore and one day she left without a word and those words now mean nothing if i hear those words from her again i wouldnt believe them i would hate it. God write cause you brought out emotions and made me remember that dark time. Poems that make me feel to me are very good. Thank you i will be back for more.
| Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by wallya20 | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice, simply witty and concise ( though the wit is the product of a bit of subterfuge committed by the poem's simplicity) My only suggestion is that you use grammar to enhance the poem when recited vocally, a couple of commas and semi colons. Otherwise, nice poem.
| Posted on 2006-08-26 00:00:00 | by azeremen12 | [ Reply to This ]
  I think I know what you are getting at with this and if im right you are so right
I believe you are referring to how people sometimes say only what they think the other person wants to hear and rarely does a person speak from the Heart
This can also be takin another way as well in that a lot of people speak from anger and say things they wish they never have
I really missed hearing from you
How are you Your little brother Nathen and your family doing
I do hope they are ok
I am getting everything finally ready for the big move back to New Jersey with Mom
It seems like I have been getting ready forever
If you have some time Please let me know what you think of some of my latest writes
I am especially proud of I Believe
God Bless
Your Friend Always
Ron

Please keep in touch!!!!
| Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Brenna
First let me say I was so happy to see your name in my comments again
In this write you brilliantly spoke of how in a relationship that seems to be fading away the words used do seem to be recycled and used over and over again in effect killing the spontaneous connection
Excellent Job Brenna
God Bless
Ron
And I really did miss hearing from you Please keep in touch
Ron
| Posted on 2006-05-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  this dosnt really make any sense. what r u trying 2 say?
| Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked it and I would not chang a thing! This showed the readers what you ment and how you would act if given the choice. Nice job, Keep it up.
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  i don't know if you meant for the repetativeness to reflect that of the characters in the poem, but i find it ironic, and clever if that was what you meant to do. In terms of improvement, you want to sound like you know what you're doing, otherwise it could be mistaken for just laziness. But i guess, that's the sense of the poem; stagnent.
| Posted on 2006-04-15 00:00:00 | by denial | [ Reply to This ]
  Interesting, I found the connection with the title unique.

This poem seems to speak about the how a person empty promises or their reptitive talk can eventually become a tremendous annoyance to those who are constantly expose to it. Believe I can relate this, I have a friend you is like this, basically speaks about the same thing day in and day out and its gets rather annoying after the first 1000 times you hear but you bear it because you have to or you simply just don't have nothing better to do, like in my case, not to sund disgusting.

Anyway, fairly good for sometime you wrote after months of no writings. Keep up the good work and have a blessed and most wonderful day.
| Posted on 2006-04-15 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't really understand what you are using "Repatative Conversations" as a metaphor for, if anything. I'd like if you'd let me know. So, I am going to take this very litrally for now. It does get very frustrating when people keep repeating the same things again and again. After reading this again, I am thinking that this is about some person who you loved and he did not love you back. Is that what you are saying in this? Please let me know. Thanks, and I'd like if you took a look at a write of mine.


Abbas
| Posted on 2006-06-05 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
  Is this about a relitionship????
If it is it a very filimer story to me.
I have found that in life when people arugue(fight) its not about this or that. But it always boils down to one thing. Shelfishness. Its never about the topic on hand. But its about why are you NOT DOING THIS FOR ME!




But ya good piece! Joshua.
| Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by ooononotthatguy | [ Reply to This ]


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