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    dots Submission Name: Nonsensical Easter Rantdots

    Author: obscureskies
    ASL Info:    19/F/Fredericton NB
    Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 11/17/15
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsNonsensical Easter Rantdots

    Watching the sun rise
    Avoiding what Iíve known all along

    Raindrop oceans drown me
    Too devastated to even compose
    Or to keep composed
    To put on that speckled mask
    I wear so well.

    Mother, take me to church
    Sing me songs of faith
    Maybe Easter is symbolic after all
    Death, and three days later, life
    Celebration of new beginnings

    The lines donít match up
    And the rhythm is all wrong
    Me in a nutshell;
    If I wasnít allergic to nuts, that is
    I guess thatís how life goes.

    Now that the sun has risen
    I pray for it to set again.

    Submitted on 2006-04-16 03:45:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yeah i'm not in to this poem very much it's just not something i like."Me in a nutshell;
    If I wasnít allergic to nuts, that is
    I guess thatís how life goes." what is this supposed to mean??? That is one of the only parts in the poem that was totally and completely unclear it's just something that i didn't get. well later.kiss.kiss.

    | Posted on 2006-04-16 00:00:00 | by hottpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, it wasn't that bad. At least you had a message there. Not written brilliantly, I think you sound muddled. What was your main theme? The fact that Easter has a lack of symbolic meaning or that you are searching for your own identity? Regardless, I got the questioning nature of the poem. good luck for next time.

    Can you read and comment for my stuff please?
    | Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by shana | [ Reply to This ]

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