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    dots Submission Name: Avian Fludots
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    Author: CrypticBard
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 369/381/227
    Words: 20
    Class/Type: Haiku/
    Total Views: 1226
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsAvian Fludots
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    rest Cellardyke Swan
    taken by H5N1
    heart lilting in Song




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    Submitted on 2006-04-16 06:07:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It takes talent to be able to catch so much emotion in so few words. Good job. Keep Writing.
    | Posted on 2006-08-22 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
      That's really cool. The whole point of haiku is to capture the essence of what you observe, and the way you portray your observation in this particular haiku is not as surreal as most haiku. It's much more realistic and tangible when you add in the H5N1 bit. I have no idea what you mean by that bit, but it really brings the mood of this whole piece down to a level that normal people can naturally feel.
    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by _proper_noun_ | [ Reply to This ]
      The haiku is the most mysterious form of poetry because its so few words. I'm really eager to know exactly what the poem is about but I have to say that what you have is really intriguing.
    | Posted on 2006-04-16 00:00:00 | by roycureton | [ Reply to This ]


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