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    dots Submission Name: For a Childdots
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    Author: Abby Sinthetic
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 177/230/53
    Words: 435
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 849
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1141



    Description:
       Just a bit about a kid.


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    dotsFor a Childdots
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    Your smile

    -Crooked & Wide-

    ceases family wars in an instant

    Giant Ocean Blue Orbs
    Light up
    Widen- when you gasp with joy
    at the wonders on a T.V. screen

    -A Monarch Butterfly-

    -A Striped Kitten-

    Your Doll laugh is Velcroe
    Love sticks to you
    Your Doll laugh, tangible
    Weighs down the air
    When it turns to your doll cries
    We all run to comfort you
    And you call us all
    "Momma"

    You love your- ugly-
    -worn-
    -pink-
    -Thrift Store-
    -shoes-
    and you wear them all the time.
    You wear two mismatched dresses
    Over pajama pants
    And we call you Eccentric Child
    And we love you still.




    Submitted on 2006-04-16 10:28:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think I noticed a site error, it says that this poem has 435 words and it doesn't lol. Anyway, ignor that compulsive habit please. This was really good (i like your icon by the way lol). It was really cute and I think you captured the image and innocence of a child very well.
    It's not usually the kind of poetry I read, but it's nice to read out side the box sometimes, you know? This was really refreshing to me, kind of inspires me to write other things besides poems about the dark side of life and everything, it's just hard for me to break that habit. There's nothing wrong with this at all! Good job....


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    | Posted on 2006-04-16 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      "A touching little poem about a small girl. It makes me think of my grandaughter, a tiny queen whom we love dearly----Good job--
    --------Mugs------
    | Posted on 2006-04-16 00:00:00 | by mugsy | [ Reply to This ]


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