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    dots Submission Name: NEW SPRING AGAINdots
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    Author: joeym1962
    ASL Info:    43 / m / oh
    Elite Ratio:    5.2 - 83/75/27
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 149
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 629



    Description:
       here is draft #2 of the poem i posted yesterday.


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    dotsNEW SPRING AGAINdots
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    i have been learning about journeys
    what bends in the path mean
    not an end but the start of a new adventure
    fallen trees are not road blocks
    instead a reason to look for a better way
    it's wonderful and scary
    never quite knowing what will happen

    like clouds
    we are on a jouney
    never knowing quite where we'll be
    from one point to the next
    maybe blowing this way and that
    or gathering strength along the way
    perhaps leaving something as we pass
    but it's the journeying that
    makes it all worth the doing




    Submitted on 2006-04-16 12:07:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great poem. I really like it. Didn't read the first version but if you think this is an improvement, you've done a great job editing. I know I'm supposed to have a fav part but I'll just end up pasting the whole thing.
    There's nothing sophisticated or brain-wrecking in it, it's a simple and direct dialogue with the reader that really makes you think.
    Loved the metaphore in the second stanza, when you compare people with clouds.
    Unfortunately, we sometimes leave more than we're suposed to and we end up drained and too tired to go on. Sad, but happens.
    If all the people were as optimistic as you, we'd end up far away from here. It's a good set of advice for poeple that are depressed.
    Thumbs-up.

    And if you have the time please check out some of my work.
    -Angie-
    | Posted on 2006-04-18 00:00:00 | by Angie444 | [ Reply to This ]



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