This one is deeply personal. It is intended more for feel than reason. There is no point to be made. It is more like the collected shots from a photo shoot capturing an encounter with the divine. Each line is a quick glimpse and the next adds a sense of movement. To analyze it is to make it into something different than it is.
In my mind, who, where and what you "be" is more important that what you believe.
If you need me to be a believer,
then I'll be leaving,
but if you share with me the love,
I'll hang around forever.
If you are familiar with the mystic poets, I am hopeful this will ring a recognizable note.
The first verse is derived from an English translation from the Koran. The last verse is an Arabic lullaby with its translation.
I found it a little hard to follow the flow with this format. But maybe it is just me.
I'd like to point out one thing though. The last stanza is not really the translation of the arabic words. Which does not detract of its beauty and message though.
The exact translation of the arabic words:
Ishq' = Passion Maabud = worshipped (not as a verb but adjective)
The translation would be: The passion of God is worshipped to God.
I am not familiar with the lullaby though I must admit.
I also like the fact that u actually translated Allah to God. Because people think that Allah has a muslim connotation although it is the arabic word for God. I think the misunderstanding comes from the fact that the muslim say that the Koran is not to be translated, so they use the arabic word in all languages. But Allah is God and at some point if we wanted we could find common ground between all religions.
Maybe that was ur message in this poem. We fight over misunderstandings, words sometimes. Why not think about, with love? Because love is the definition of the divine.
I think the best thing in your poems is that they promote love and peace. They all have this soothing effect, it is like ur at peace with urself and the world. they have this lake-like quality, the calm and quiet that drive u to think.
It is like after the passion subsides, remains the calm and that's where u go from. Somehow the fresh calm after the storm.
I like your title. It is a very smart play on words. Be loved and beloved.
Thanks for the read and I hope all is well with you. Viviane
I was not expecting to be moved as I was when I read this. It was so well written. I loved the flow and format. I loved the including of actual texts, it gave it a overall spiritual feel that warmed my soul. I thoroughly enjoyed this.
wow, this was almost trance-like in effect the way i read this out to myself. my eyes almost blurred reading this hahah! the repetition of certain key words in what i think is called the saccadic (rapid-eye) technique worked really well with this piece. truly, a beautiful message... which reminds me of Rumi in a way... he was a mystic poet, wasn't he?
yes, i very much enjoyed too. such a spiritual message of love and hope. and very touching and sweet. ~patchouli
Great and powerful last stanza! You hit the nail right on the head...all those names mean what you say, yet we let our differing opinions and mindsets turn them into war and hate. I also like the reference to the eyes...yeah...the gateways to the soul. The format of it and the way it sucks you in word by word was mesmerizing! I was in a trance reading it! And I think thats presicely how you intended it...cool stuff!