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    dots Submission Name: Two Haikusdots
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    Author: marigold
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 182/203/89
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTwo Haikusdots
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    Delirium

    A buttercup swayed
    the rain was beating coldly
    panflutes in the wind.
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    Forever Vanished

    Oh where the lost nights
    when stars sung such lullabies
    and shadows whispered.





    Submitted on 2006-04-16 18:24:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      uh...
    the second one would be better if you put.
    where are the lost nights
    instead of oh where the/
    | Posted on 2006-04-16 00:00:00 | by die_another_day | [ Reply to This ]


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