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    dots Submission Name: Rain Angeldots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsRain Angeldots
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    The rain falls gently around us,
    Souls completely filled ready to bust.
    The rain glimmers and enhances your face,
    Your arms extended dancing in the rain with angelic grace.
    Your feet making no sound,
    As you splash water all around.
    You turn to me in discreet fashion,
    Staring in your wonderful eyes, I swear allegiance to your passion.
    You can tell I believe dancing in the rain is juvenile,
    But you continue to prance and give me a smile.
    At that moment my love for you never weakens,
    Because youre what Ive spent my whole life seeking.




    Submitted on 2004-01-21 23:15:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beautiful imagery. It makes the heart leap. I do agree, though, that the rhythm could be a little better.
    | Posted on 2004-01-22 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]
      Lovely thoughts,- you get the feelings across the screen. Here and there a halt where perhaps too many syllables are jammed together, but that is just my take on it. The important thing is the touching, loving expression brought forth.
    | Posted on 2004-01-22 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      now this is good, really good
    | Posted on 2004-01-22 00:00:00 | by Trystam | [ Reply to This ]


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