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Author:	DarkenedSoul
ASL Info:	30/m/astral dreams
Elite Ratio:	4.29 - 77/60/17
Words:	122

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	99
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	814

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Dance In Shadows dots

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I want to dance in shadows
beneath the pale moon light;
dance in the shadows
let my spirit take flight.
Awaken the spirits of harvest moon night.
I want to dance in the shadows
because it feels right.
We'll build a fire of summer flame
and dance to a rhythm long without name.
Watch the ashes like fireflies
dance across the midnight skies,
move to the drums of heartbeat life;
forget the world and all its strife.
Dance in the shadows till day steals night.
Loose yourself in an ancient dance;
find yourself by embracing chance.
Accept the moment of sweet surrender;
life has never been such splendor.
Dance in the shadows of harvest moon
till day steals night again so soon.

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I like this poem. It is free spirited and all about just letting yourself go. I love the moon and all its beauty. To watch the full moon rising above the ocean is so beautiful and I am fortunate that I live near the ocean so I can go and view this remarkable sight often. I have only one suggestion for this poem. I would classify this one as happy rather than misc. I think this is definitely a happy poem. It made me smile as I read it. It has a nice flow and rhyme scheme to it and is well written and expressed. Nice job. Take care.

Lorna
| Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
Nice poem, I like the main ideea of dancing in the shadows and forgeting about everything around you. I didn't quite get the thing with the harvest moon night, we don't have harvest kind of thingies in my country.
At first, the rhyming seems a bit forced, poems, especially this one in which you're talking about freedom and release don't really have to rhyme.
But further it improves and the ending is really perfect. I really like these lines:
We'll build a fire of summer flame
and dance to a rhythm long without name.
Watch the ashes like fireflies
dance across the midnight skies,
move to the drums of heartbeat life;
forget the world and all its strife.

They seem like the deepest.
Good write overall. Thumbs-up!
And if you have the time,please check out some of my work.
-Angie-
| Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by Angie444 | [ Reply to This ]

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