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    dots Submission Name: Waiting for the Sandmandots
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    Author: MyFairCalamity
    ASL Info:    17**I'm a lady**philly
    Elite Ratio:    7.1 - 115/67/16
    Words: 379
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       i was SO loopy when i wrote this.


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    dotsWaiting for the Sandmandots
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    So sleepy when Iím supposed to be awake,
    And so alert when I should be asleep.
    This seems to be a cycle I cannot break,
    Now I feel that my life is on repeat.

    I lie here in bed, covers pulled up to my chin
    With my eyes shut tight, counting tiny sheep.
    It feels like Iím fighting a battle I cannot win.
    Boy I wish I could get some sleep.

    Those pills I took donít seem to be workiní
    I wonder how long until I have to start my day.
    I can feel the red digits behind me lurkiní
    Stupid clock wonít leave me be.

    I would never get any shut-eye
    If I turned over and peeked at the time.
    Cause Iíd know every minute that would go by
    And count down the moments until I must rise.

    Those scarlet numbers are burning a hole in my neck
    And wanting to look is making me antsy.
    But if I open my eyes Iíll be a nervous wreck,
    And for Peteís sake, do I really need that?

    Damn those ruby numerals to hell,
    The blasted things have gotten the best of me.
    I know itís 1:06 and when the minutes pass I can tell,
    Well, I still have five hours to get some rest.

    Itís 2:31 now, those numbers can be really tricky.
    With three and a half hours of sleep Iíll be fine.
    But if I donít get any tomorrow will be icky,
    When that alarm clock goes off, Iíll be outta time.

    The clock just reached 3:50 and still I am not sleeping
    God those sheep are flippiní freaky.
    Over that ugly fence they keep on leaping.
    Is catching a few Zs too much to ask?

    Well the sunís starting to come up anyway,
    So falling asleep now would be pointless.
    Iíll just get up early and start off my day,
    No sleep at all is better than 42 minutes.

    But Iím so comfortable right here in my bed,
    Laying here for awhile wonít do any harm.
    Iíll just close my eyes now and rest my head.
    I wonder how those sheep jump for so longÖ

    (Beep-Beep-Beep)




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      Wow. I really like this. I've had sleepness nights also and you've captured how I feel! I like how you add some humour into it. I like how you add falling asleep right as the alarm goes off. Write On!

    -Sarah
    | Posted on 2006-05-01 00:00:00 | by giver_of_death | [ Reply to This ]
      This had me smiling as I read it. And cringing, at the thought of that buzzer on the alarm clock going off just when you finally get to sleep. Insomnia is rough.
    The 2nd part was a funny image.. lying in bed, covers pulled up to your chin, eyes shut, counting those darn sheep.
    Also the battle with not wanting to look at the clock numbers as they slowly change and the night drags on.
    I think the fact that you name the numbers a different shade of red each time emphasizes the long insomiac night you were having.
    Your frustration with the sheep was cute..
    and you ended it on a funny note.
    The entire right was cute. I enjoyed reading it.

    | Posted on 2006-04-21 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Awesome!
    This poem totally describes what I have been dealing with for years after years. I am an insomniac, so I know what you describing and what the feelings you are talking about.

    ''So sleepy when Iím supposed to be awake,
    And so alert when I should be asleep.
    This seems to be a cycle I cannot break,
    Now I feel that my life is on repeat.''
    A great begining, describes what the poem is about.

    ''But Iím so comfortable right here in my bed,
    Laying here for awhile wonít do any harm.
    Iíll just close my eyes now and rest my head.
    I wonder how those sheep jump for so longÖ
    (Beep-Beep-Beep)''
    Very nice... falling asleep right before the alarm goes off.
    Your poem is awesome. I'll add it to my favorite.

    | Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by TheDarkKing | [ Reply to This ]
      Kate, I love this... and I already told you that... so now I'm gonna tell you why.
    (I have nothing but time and opinions. [censored].. and pop-ups.)

    "So sleepy when Iím supposed to be awake,
    And so alert when I should be asleep.
    This seems to be a cycle I cannot break,
    Now I feel that my life is on repeat."

    Oh boyy do I know how that is... and it SUCKS. Don't you hate it when your days all just run together cause there doesn't seem to be a night to separate them? Bad times, but you said it wonderfully

    "Those pills I took donít seem to be workiní"

    You know, I had that exact same problem the other night. I told you about it. I took like 5 sleeping pills and I still couldn't sleep... until around like 4. What great timing.

    "I would never get any shut-eye
    If I turned over and peeked at the time."

    Yeah, knowing what time it is and every minute thats passing just keeps you awake and drives you nuts...

    "Those scarlet numbers are burning a hole in my neck
    And wanting to look is making me antsy"

    ...but you still reaaaallly wanna know anyway.

    "And for Peteís sake, do I really need that?"

    lol Hah Pete

    "God those sheep are flippiní freaky.
    Over that ugly fence they keep on leaping."

    Hah Try to count happier things. Sheep are diabolical. Think about me... and you... dancing.
    Or maybe flying cows...

    "Is catching a few Zs too much to ask?"

    I think not, but... sometimes it sure seems that way.

    "Well the sunís starting to come up anyway,
    So falling asleep now would be pointless.
    Iíll just get up early and start off my day,
    No sleep at all is better than 42 minutes."

    I like that part. It's possibly one of my favorites.
    It's very true.

    "But Iím so comfortable right here in my bed,
    Laying here for awhile wonít do any harm."

    Yeah... thats what you think... but then...

    "(Beep-Beep-Beep)"

    ...Oh jeez. There goes another night.
    lol dont you hate how that happens?
    I certainly do.

    As you can see, I like the whole thing, but another one of my favorite lines is, "I wonder how those sheep jump for so longÖ" just because it made me laugh.

    I like how real it felt. (If that makes any sence.) With all the description and stuff, it almost felt like I was there... staring at that horrible clock too.

    Good job on finding all those different words for "red." lol I liked that.

    Overall... as always, dear
    Wonderfully done

    You're awesome!!

    Love always
    Your pal

    -nikkki
    (thats me)
    | Posted on 2006-04-18 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


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