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    dots Submission Name: I Am Herdots

    Author: LadyChaos
    ASL Info:    19/F/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 718/606/95
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 918
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsI Am Herdots

    I am her sunglasses--
    Worn only at night,
    To hide her broken eyes
    From the world.

    I am her many scars,
    Grafiti on the walls of her skin,
    Screaming the story no one wants to hear

    I am her black clothes,
    The only color dark enough
    To match her heart

    I am her purity,
    Forever lost, forever longed for,
    Forever mourned

    I am her
    Wondering what she did to deserve this---


    Submitted on 2006-04-17 11:54:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lots of emotion......i didnt enjoy this greatly, yet for what it said and what you painted for my eyes with your words, this is a deep dark-rooted poem...good work...
    | Posted on 2007-12-04 00:00:00 | by iaida | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a great poem! Very heart felt! sorry for the pain, hope everything gets better!?!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      O darling im so sorry. I wish there was more i could do/say. I also wanted to thank you for ur comments but u already kno that. Ur still pure baby, as much as anybody in this world of dirty faced angels. You are her - ur the her i dream about and want to hold at night. It'll be ok. I can't promise, but i'll do everything i can to make it tru. I <3 u cuz im too much of a pussy to say it aloud.
    | Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]
      this seem to be very deep but it also seems you left the readers wanting to read more
    abuse is i think one of the worst crimes in life
    that to many people get away with

    great write
    | Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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