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    dots Submission Name: My life's partnerdots
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    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 604
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       A simple but heartfelt accounting of the appreciation and admiration I have for my wife.


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    dotsMy life's partnerdots
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    Days flow as an ambitious current,
    Each morning brings enchantment
    Awakening with you in my arms.
    You spur me to reach for the gold
    An unspoken desire to please you.

    Everything I do, I do for you
    Simply because it feels right.
    From brow beaten second class
    To preeminent partner in life,
    You are why I am.

    That previous life of mine.
    One that circumvented my will,
    Was beneficial… Beneficial in that it
    Makes me aware of a true soulmate.
    The producer of appreciation
    To what I now attain.

    You are my comeuppance,
    As I too freely bestow on you.
    Though we began our journey late
    Only sweetens our day’s future.

    Thank you for the awakening
    Of that in me which was lost
    Thank you for the love
    Whence before I was cross
    Thank you for the faith
    Your push is my fuel
    Thank you for the love
    Where before was none





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      reads like wedding vows.. the kind that leaves tears in everybodies eyes..I am sure, as I can see that your lady love apprectiates what you have written
    | Posted on 2006-05-11 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a great emotional piece and i guess at my age i probably felt that way once about somebody. but time changed that and now when i read something like this i feel for myself personally i am glad i woke up
    well put together no bad intent given just my point of view

    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh sweetheart-
    (Gush, gush) This is so beautiful! I had to pop in & read it again! Waking up in your arms, having you kiss me all over when you leave, you capture the enchantment very well with your words! I love the old fashioned, flowery romance in your writing! I always have. You know I'll always consider our love a gift-one that we both deserved. And I'll always treat you as such!
    You gettin a gold star tonite, you such a good student! (tee hee)
    Love always,
    your besotted lady Cleo
    | Posted on 2006-04-18 00:00:00 | by CleoCollier | [ Reply to This ]


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