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    dots Submission Name: Sanctuarydots
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    Author: Saint
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Boston, MA
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 87/119/30
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 863
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 964



    Description:
       Becoming free. Being calm. Well, sorta.


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    dotsSanctuarydots
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    Sit on the edge of the doorway
    Looking up at the moon at night
    There are no more clouds to block the view
    Eyes shining in the light

    Sitting here for hours
    In this sanctuary above clouds
    The breeze from here is so gentle
    Giving off the sweetest of sounds

    Breathing in and out
    Heart clear from burden and chain
    Stand in the light that embraces and guides
    Up here there is no pain

    Looking down there is no fear
    Of the future dawning near
    From this view there are no lies
    A single raindrop is a tear

    It will not rain tonight
    No reason at all to cry
    Safe in this sanctuary higher than lovers glade
    No wasting breath on unhappy sigh

    Sitting in this sanctuary
    Smiling at life’s opportune moments
    Flying away from serenity most unreal
    And back to a list of atonements




    Submitted on 2006-04-17 14:07:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is really good, and i'm really glad to have read it.
    i'm having a hard time right now on this site to even find something to say and i'm glad i can say something about this piece.
    first off, i would like to say that i've always loved the word "sanctuary"
    and i'm glad someone wrote something of it,
    and didn't do a crappy job at it.

    Sitting here for hours
    In this sanctuary above clouds
    The breeze from here is so gentle
    Giving off the sweetest of sounds

    i feel that almost every time i Really try to breathe in my life.
    and it's good to see you're using a variety of words.
    this probably isn't good feedback because i'm just babbling...

    Peace<3

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    | Posted on 2007-11-22 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, how is everything with you? This was so awesome there was so much peace to it, and I totally know what you mean....I have these days every now and then when nothing goes wrong. I'll have to read alot more of yours then, I've been all lazy with that but I'm here now aren't I? anyway I really really liked this one. a definate faves add.
    love ya,
    jess
    | Posted on 2006-04-29 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      Such a lovely and relaxing piece. I just felt so serene whilest reading this. Very nice rhyme scheme, it didn't sound too forced or anything which really help the feeling. The flow as well helped. Nice structure, it helped tie everything together very well. I really enjoyed the imagery in this piece, it brought me back to a few nice memories of just being ultimately relaxed. I think my favorite lines had to be the last stanza. Such a lovely ending. Great job, keep writing

    Ciao
    Brandy
    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by rockunsilenced | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really quite beutiful
    I found this write to be incredibley relaxing
    The whole poem flowed as if one was in meditation and the last line brings them back to Earth
    Very Well Done
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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