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    dots Submission Name: Never alone againdots

    Author: ROSHAY9992000
    ASL Info:    22/m/fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.18 - 16/12/12
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 769
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsNever alone againdots

    Why do I love My Goddess
    Only the sands of time will tell
    Could it be the heartache and pain I've received
    without her right next to me
    Or the constant thoughts and hope
    Racing through my dreams
    Oh the thoughts of you
    Your angelic voice , it makes me speechless
    Your vivid blue eyes , consummate my emotions
    The touch of flesh on flesh , awoke my magnetism to you
    And that soul-full kiss , compels my animalistic excitement
    Being without you lacerated my heart to insignificance
    For it won't work alone , your needed to keep me going
    I felt so alone ,so deficient
    Without the constant infatuation from you
    You've brought me so much self-worth and confidence
    My devotion to you is everlasting
    forever until time stands still
    My life's desire is to live my life full
    With MY GODDESS by my side

    Submitted on 2006-04-17 14:17:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked how you tied my goddess at the end with the first line. Kind of sums the whole poem up so to speak. Your word choice was refreshing and exuberant. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by Candyman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is some good work, but it's really not the type of poetry that interests me...It held my attention near the beginning, but then I lost it near the end for some reason. I really don't know why, but your poem didn't keep me interested, mostly because it's not my type of read. Keep writing though, no offense meant!

    | Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a pretty good write and for a love poem you made some of it your own and the beginning really kept me going but near the end it just kinda dropped off in my mind.....please don't get offended by this becuz I could be getting the wrong impression, and it's not even a bad thing but some of this write seemed more towards lust then love, but some of it wasn't like that. overall good one, keep writing and i'll keep reading you have a lot of talent.
    | Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]

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