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    dots Submission Name: Supercell Over Springfielddots
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    Author: Cigarz
    ASL Info:    35/M/NH
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 258/183/50
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 235
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1266



    Description:
       This was a contest submission for the Weatherman project. Kind of fun;)


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    dotsSupercell Over Springfielddots
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    Ripping countrified,
    peeling back ages of pigeon doo
    and drywall mold -
    rusted metallic sheets -
    teddy-bear fluff -
    dried food crumbs
    and dust bunnies.
    You said it was just a breeze --
    My double-wide rests in Nebraska
    and I'm in Missouri.

    A South by Southwest heading.

    Iron sheets of piss-down hate
    complicate a morning escape by your standard,
    obstructing the gravel holes that ate my tires
    over-easy with a healthy dash of salt
    as I tried to drive away.

    She's rolling North on 81.
    Convoy of spin-offs catch her tail.

    Treated two-by-fours barely pass me by,
    driving cannon-like
    into mother Bell's poles,
    Johnny Seed's trees.
    Cinderblock foundations shattered,
    chickens learning to fly,
    children learning to hide,
    schools learning to fill out insurance claims.
    Doppler hates us and we're all going to die.

    She's doubled back for a second try.

    College boy, you couldn't see it coming?
    Televised poser with an outdated tie!
    SUV martyr!
    Get in my basement,
    Dick.




    Submitted on 2006-04-17 16:18:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like the imagery you create. The form is a bit erratic though. It's great though.
    | Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by shana | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey
    Let me start off by saying I havent seen you in a while I hope everything is ok
    In this write I liked the idea of speaking of the weather from a rvs point of view
    This was very creative and easy to follow
    The ending threw me off a little bit as it was totally unexpected
    Great Job with this one
    Keep in touch
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]



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