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    dots Submission Name: The Reasondots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 665
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I don't know...just wanted to post something...this kind of came to me...I want to be the object of someone's desire...that's all I got...

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    dotsThe Reasondots

    I want you to look at me
    Like maybe, I'm really here...
    I want lights in your eyes
    I want a whisper in my ear

    I want you to touch me
    Like I'm a magnificent prize that you've won
    I want cotton candy and caramel apples
    I want absence of the sun

    I want a golden opportunity
    To feel like someone other than myself
    I like how I look through your eyes
    I don't think this can be helped

    I want you to take my hand and jump with me
    Into a river of desire
    I want romance and passion
    I want to set the house on fire

    I want to feel like a girl, sometimes,
    Though I am such a man...
    I don't expect you to relate
    But I hope you'll understand.

    I want to be that pillow that you hug so tightly
    I want that sparkle in your eye
    I want to be the reason that you smile
    But not the reason that you cry...

    Submitted on 2006-04-17 17:07:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you know what from all the poem i have read this one stands very different, this is unique poem, since you are the first person who has written about your craving.
    not many people like to write something personal.

    i am very lonely but was never able to accept it so innocently, sometimes every second is sacary without someone, my someone is a girl whom i proposed but was rejected and whole world came falling over me. Sometimes at sunsets and when her thougths light a candle in my mind, i feel so incomplete.
    and sometime a want to get over this beautiful helplessness and maybe find someone to fulfil me.
    Maybe i can feel the craving to be wanted, to find someone waiting for me, someone who is there when i cry, someone who can feel proud to be with me, maybe someday i will find someone who will be waiting for me, watching me in her dreams.

    I want to be that pillow that you hug so tightly
    I want that sparkle in your eye
    I want to be the reason that you smile
    But not the reason that you cry...

    well these were my fav lines and i think you understand why.

    | Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by imagination | [ Reply to This ]
      Raivn...this is absolutely...without a doubt....my favorite of all the poems that you have ever written! I can totally relate to this right now! My heart and stomach felt so odd while reading this. I love it. I like the way it was written. Good rhyme. Great write. It's definately going on my favorites list.
    | Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
      I mentally sighed when I read the title (sorta cheesy xP), but I was pleasantly surprised when I started reading.

    Your rhyme scheme was pleasant, it wasn't forced like a lot of things can seem to be on here... -shifty eyes-

    "I want to feel like a girl, sometimes,
    Though I am such a man..."

    I can relate to that being a gay man. :p Actually I thought you were a gay man for a second when I read that xD I like it though. It's sweet but not blah.
    | Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by rawrpanda | [ Reply to This ]

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