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    dots Submission Name: My Sweet Friend.::dots
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    Author: myonlysalvation
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 41/48/42
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       this is pretty old poem that i wrote. i hope someone can sort of relate. i like this one of mine, its one of my favorites.


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    dotsMy Sweet Friend.::dots
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    When i sat down to cry,
    you wiped my tears and said good-bye
    the feelings push forward, so strong;
    you'll never know.
    the empty space you try to fill, you refuse
    to let go of.
    i know we'll meet again. my sweet friend.
    all the memories left for dead. but so many
    more tears left to shed.
    i know we'll meet again.
    and when i broke down to cry;
    you wiped my tears dry and said good-bye
    your betrayal; your misery is breaking me.
    the words unspoken from someone who
    could not speak.

    but Through the fear, past all the lies
    a love undies.
    from far away, you stay to cry.






    (take it all in vain
    leave me just the same

    i won't say a word
    and i'll never let it HURT.)




    Submitted on 2006-04-17 18:44:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hon, I love your writings, I really do. They are always so deep and beautiful. How are you doing? I really hope to hear from you soon! I love you!
    Alissa
    | Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this poem, I can see the point and it painted a very good image for me... I have no critism for it, and all I can do is say good job, and if this has happened to you than this poem is perfect for it, I can relate to it very well...

    God Bless

    *!~Lizzie~!*
    | Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by angeldust | [ Reply to This ]


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