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    dots Submission Name: lustydots
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    Author: ariadne
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 99/85/26
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotslustydots
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    The clutching of my shoulder
    scratching with my nails
    strong hands pulling backwards
    thumbs locked in my belt loops
    surely consequences entail

    your back pressed against a wall
    hands pulling at your hair
    shudders down and up your spine
    hands in my back pockets
    was there ever such a pair

    caught up within a warm grasp
    dancing to this better song
    far too close to resist it
    eyes looking up at hunger in you
    a miracle we have waited this long




    Submitted on 2004-05-07 14:55:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      aww this was sweet this is like how i feel about my b/f when me and him are in an intese moment jsut about to kiss, aww its great, the feeling is wonderful, like no one can ever like touch you b/c you are protected my an aura of love w/ that other person ah, isnt it great, you write was spectacular, great job
    | Posted on 2004-05-07 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      animalistic behavior suits us all...lust is more of feeling than love...animals aren't capable of being truly monogamous...keepem cuming.
    | Posted on 2004-05-07 00:00:00 | by pestiferous | [ Reply to This ]
      Very descriptive. I love the way it took me back. I imagined making out in alley ways on Saturday nights, really drunk. Sexy piece.
    | Posted on 2004-05-07 00:00:00 | by Casper | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww, Don't ya just love the feeling? I miss it a lot. This was good and descriptive. I like it. Great write!
    | Posted on 2004-05-07 00:00:00 | by Broken heart dies | [ Reply to This ]


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