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    dots Submission Name: Sailing Fowarddots

    Author: slntfirflm
    ASL Info:    26/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    5.76 - 301/331/93
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 895
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 966

       To Mike, who seemed to carry elite skills pretty damn far. See you when you get back!

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    dotsSailing Fowarddots

    But not goodbye;
    The ship set sail
    Quarter to five.

    We waved to him
    from along the shore;
    watching each step
    when he climbed aboard.

    Many new journeys
    lay ahead for this man,
    nothing left,
    but the elite skills band.

    The director may be gone
    yet, the band
    still plays on
    to the rythems and tunes
    practiced before.

    Practicing was a short sort
    a little here,
    then play time there.
    Nothing interferred
    when the internets soared.

    Chat to chat,
    with many laughs
    and debates;
    everyone knew the place.

    Watching the ship
    take off from shore,
    we all know
    the leader will explore.

    To what, we lay curious
    and after awhile will know,
    what that little director
    went looking for.

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