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    dots Submission Name: Rigged Gamedots
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    Author: Cigarz
    ASL Info:    35/M/NH
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 258/183/50
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 304
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 422



    Description:
       A super-fast automatic piece from last night. It reads like an barker's call, and ya know, I don't think it's too shabby.


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    dotsRigged Gamedots
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    He gestures there,
    sizing you with potential
    like an overstuffed gorilla
    down from a carnival shelf.
    Plink!
    Give that man a Darwinian edge
    and make the lady smile.
    There's a winner everytime,
    give her a spin,
    give her a whirl.
    Don't forget about the kiddies
    at home,
    bring 'em
    something to smile about.
    Plink.




    Submitted on 2006-04-18 09:00:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Man I agree, It's not too shabby at all.

    My kind of writing (although i'm actually hopeless at it) I appreciate those who can get away with stuff like this.

    Too many hidden things, but I appreciate the ones I could find.

    Excellent work!

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-04-21 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, those guys learn to spot the ones they can lure in and know all the tricks, don't they? For my husband (the EERT marksman) those shooting games are something he can NEVER pass up even though he knows they're rigged...LOL

    I agree, this wasn't too shabby :)

    ~B~
    | Posted on 2006-04-18 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
      hehe. Reminds me of the Easter Show. I never play anymore. Ever. I like it the poem a lot though. The frustration shows through the subtlety. mmm... every time is two words though ... (line eight)

    Shana.
    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by shana | [ Reply to This ]



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