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my name


Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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acrostic poem... i think it was edgar allen poe that told us his sweet hearts name in coded acrostic poem.... i forget the poem, but her name was fran!!!


my name



My name is hard
everyone is quick to
remind me.
Only my countrymen
never mispronounce it.

Many people
enjoy the meaning
rumored to be holy
oil found during Easter
near the church.

Mistakes are made
even when I
reap the benefits
of changing my
name to Mimi.




Submitted on 2006-04-18 12:21:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Meron, what a beautiful name. Spanish? I can just feel the "r" rolling off my tongue. ;)

I've always liked acrostics. They give a nice format to a poem and are harder to write than some think. Like all closed form poetry, words and meter must fit within the confines. So a good vocabulary is always useful as well as a strong understanding of grammar and syntax.

You seem to have both and it shows in your poetry.

This was a nice little description of your name and how it affects you.

Thanks for sharing,

drowning_queen
| Posted on 2006-05-26 00:00:00 | by drowning_queen | [ Reply to This ]
  Cute little acrostic poem, the only suggestion I have is that you change all the beginning lines to capital letters:
My name is hard
(E)veryone is quick to
(R)emind me.
Only my countrymen
(N)ever mispronounce it.

Many people
Enjoy the meaning
Rumored to be holy
Oil found during Easter
(N)ear the church.
How do you pronounce it? Mare-in?
P.S- I love the name Mimi. Its such a... crazy rocker name. If I could in any way, justify calling myself and making others call me Mimi, I would pretty much love life.
I get stuck with nicknames like Ann. Or Ang... which is alil' strange considering my name is Andrea. But its not too bad.

Good work and good luck!
-Ann
| Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]


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