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    dots Submission Name: don't godots
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    Author: muhammed
    ASL Info:    23/male/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 87/124/111
    Words: 315
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 219
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1687



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    dotsdon't godots
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    don't go just look at me
    and you will see
    how much I need you
    you can leave me but I can never leave you
    because only with you I live
    from your ear i only took my breath
    it's not a bout cry
    can't you understand of you leave me I will die
    Good bye
    you don't know how hard of this word can be
    if you know what could happened to me
    I Page you to stay with me
    I don't ask for premises or garnty
    just stay
    and you will see every thing gonna be OK
    you don't have to love me because I love you
    I didn't ask for your sympathy

    don't love me because I'm weak
    don't love me because been break
    love me for the sake of the old days remember this days ?
    and all the love you felt for me
    remember how much you loved me

    if you leave me how long do you think I could leave
    if I not have you what i have to give

    oh from all this tears comes from
    and when we sad why we cry
    and where love goes when it die
    is it to a grave in the heart
    and why we feel from the heart
    I don't know
    i dint know

    what you did to me
    how this could be
    how I love you more then life it self
    more then my dignity
    you can't feel
    but can't you see
    don't you have one tear to cry for me

    now I'm in me knees
    bagging you pleas
    don't leave
    no
    don't go
    don't go




    Submitted on 2006-04-18 12:24:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very strong expression of emotion here; you have a point to make and go for it. However, I might point out spelling and grammar problems--but since I think that English might not be your first language, I'm also tempted to congratulate you on getting that far. I only hope I can reach that level in Japanese.

    Keep up the writing--after all, words keep us alive.

    Now off to wash dishes!

    --crimson

    P.S. Did you photoshop that rose yourself?
    | Posted on 2007-06-05 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is awsome
    and this part here

    "if you leave me how long do you think I could leave
    if I not have you what i have to give

    oh from all this tears comes from
    and when when we sad why we cry
    and where love goes when it day
    is it to a grave in the heart
    and why we fell from the heart
    I don't know
    i dint know

    what you did to me
    how this could be
    how I love you more then life it self
    more then my dignity
    you can't feel
    but can't you see
    don't you have one tear to cry for me

    now I'm in me knees
    bagging you pleas
    don't leave
    no
    don't go
    don't go "


    it reminds me of an asetic


    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Great surprise of events, like the rain is embracing the rainbow in the most unique way.Do not impress the sun with illusions everdreamers.

    D` Alin
    | Posted on 2006-04-18 00:00:00 | by DAlin | [ Reply to This ]
      i could totally relate to this..........ive been going through this myself of late....
    the pain of a lover abandoning or turning there back on what was once an amazing bond of love and devotion......
    if they could only look inside our souls and know our mind and feel our pain.........
    there is a hope they would not leave......
    I really loved this.....great work
    God Bless
    Take Care
    Lotsaluv
    Nadine
    Smile cause your worth it :)
    | Posted on 2006-04-18 00:00:00 | by lostspirit | [ Reply to This ]



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