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    dots Submission Name: Sanitydots

    Author: Shadows Life
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 127/127/27
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 785
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       hmmm dont know what i was aiming at but here it is

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    the sweet caress of reason upon a troubled mind

    the thorns of a reality creeping to a surface of cold hard stone

    the touch of imagination wiped out by the bitter taste of destiny


    the prison of a human mind that knows not the taste of joy

    the slow decay of a flower that shall never bloom

    oh sanity...

    the tragic flaw of the human condition

    Submitted on 2006-04-18 12:46:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Define Sanity....? Imagination is mre sane for e than any meal of twisted so called logic...though admittedly balance is necessary to make it through. I enjoyed reading this too. Half the world are crazy and think they are sane. Whereas I know Im an absolute lunatic

    | Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really interesting
    Though I respectively disagree with you
    This life we are living is all under our control
    We can ask for help by asking the Lord into our hearts but if we dont then Our Life is totally up to us
    I liked this
    You captured an emotion in me that was lying dormant for far too long
    God Bless

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    | Posted on 2006-04-18 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice work! I think you can leave out the last line though, id hindered your flow to me. I liked the imagery of this. I liked the wording also. I also think you could add more to this when you get a chance. I will read more of your work ASAP. this was very good.

    | Posted on 2006-04-18 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this!!!!!! shows the point of sanity...which i have mingled with how its a caress/yet a punishment as if someone were incarcerated into being sane so yeah i like DIS!!!!

    | Posted on 2006-04-18 00:00:00 | by MartiniMadeLvr | [ Reply to This ]

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