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    dots Submission Name: Haunting Medots

    Author: xSweetestThingx
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Kentucky
    Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 81/119/28
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 865
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 1091

       Okay, it's been a while.
    Bradley and I are doing great.
    I love him so much.
    But we hit a rough patch a while back.
    The other guy that I wrote most of my poetry about, Josh, started his stuff up again.
    And well... I kinda fell for it.
    This was me getting out my aggression for him being stupid and hurting me again.

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    dotsHaunting Medots

    I shouldn't want you still
    for the lamb to the slaughter
    was my heart in your hands
    and with a daggar of memories
    your still stabbing into my head
    everyday and all night
    I still think of your kiss
    wishing the poison I tasted
    wouldn't hurt quite like this
    even though a new love
    has graced my broken heart
    your shadow still haunts me
    like all fire still begins with a spark
    with this power you hold over me
    I'm still a animal in your cage
    waiting for a glimpse of light
    for any chance to escape
    in this dark place you've put me
    making me choose like you are
    someone will hurt like me
    and end up with a freshly broken heart
    so this time it's my time
    I'm breaking the lock
    and while you watch me leave
    baby, please don't be in shock
    for this is what you've earned
    for putting me through hell
    no more chances from me
    now you have a story of heartbreak to tell

    Submitted on 2006-04-18 22:44:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this one was really great. Many people get that feeling, they hold onto an old love even though they have a new one. Its one of the many flaws in humanity.

    The poem was great. I loved the detail you put into it. I especailly liked these three lines:
    "I still think of your kiss
    wishing the poison I tasted
    wouldn't hurt quite like this"

    I absolutely love the way you worded that.It was beautiful. I look forward to reading more of your poems.
    | Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by camoflage | [ Reply to This ]

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