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    dots Submission Name: sweet and kinddots
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    Author: Tinasha
    ASL Info:    20/Female/Oklahoma City
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 100/142/41
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 797
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    Sweet
    Sweet and charming
    Sweet and charming and cute
    And sweet
    And meek
    And arrogant
    And kind
    And sweet
    And kind
    And sweet
    And kind to me
    And makes me laugh
    Makes me smile
    Makes me laugh and smile
    And glow
    And smile and glow
    And smile and grow
    To like him more
    To like his eyes
    To like his skin
    To grow to like the him within
    Within the time
    Within the day
    The time of day
    I have to learn
    I have to see
    I have to learn and see the he
    The he thatís sweet
    And kind and sweet
    And kind and meek
    This arrogant he
    Thatís kind and cute
    Thatís kind to me
    That makes me smile
    That makes me glow
    That makes me so very glad to know
                                                                     him.





    Submitted on 2006-04-19 02:02:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well. i shall be the first of many i'm sure to say this, but it was a little repetitive. as a poet, one would tend to stray away from monotony, and tend more towards imagery and making the reader (or recipient as the case may be) feel the emotion you are attempting to convey. it sounds like the writer has very strong feelings towards someone, however, i sense a bit of apprehension. perhaps its my imagination, though.
    | Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by Lackluster | [ Reply to This ]
      you know, i really liked the short fast beat of it..like jumbled thoughts unravelling all at once. i dont even really mind the repetition of Sweet and Kind....however, all the And's is what is a bit of a turn off for me. this whole write is about repetition, and i dont mind most of them...like the I Have, To Know, That Makes sentences...if you could cut out all those Ands i think this would be very upbeat and enjoyable to read
    | Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]


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