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    dots Submission Name: Musicdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 516
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 556



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       I wrote this a long, long time ago...My special little ode to music. Thought I would share...


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    dotsMusicdots
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    Make me laugh.
    Make me cry.
    Give me a reason.
    Ask me why.
    Make me dance.
    Get stuck in my head.
    Help me fall asleep.
    Get me out of bed.
    Take me away.
    Make me feel at home.
    Turn my knees to mush.
    Keep me strong.
    Show me how to be empowered.
    Help me to give in.
    Console me when I've lost.
    Get me pumped to win.
    You're with me everywhere,
    Every moment, of every day.
    I just turn on the radio,
    And let the music play.




    Submitted on 2006-04-19 08:24:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is great though at times it is jumping from one thing to another too fast.
    Like here:
    "Make me cry.
    Give me a reason.
    Ask me why."
    It moves around a little too fast and can be a little confusing.
    That is the only real problem that I see here.
    So keep writing...
    ~Kat
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by Crescent | [ Reply to This ]
      Great ode to music! Sometimes it surprises me when I meet someone who doesn't really listen to music. But no matter where I am if there's music playing I have to listen, if only for a sec, to see whats playing. I think music can help any mood. Well, there are exceptions of course. Any way I like the poem. I think in line 13 you are either missing a word or added wrongly to the word empower because that line doesn't make much sense. The flow seemed to change from the begining to the end but other than that it is a good piece. Glad to see a fellow music lover. Keep listening.

    - -Oli
    | Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by Oli | [ Reply to This ]
      Music is such a great thing. It's my life. I'm nearly always listening to it and of course...as you know...I'm a musician. I can really relate to this. Great write.
    | Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]


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