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    dots Submission Name: Dark Addictiondots

    Author: KStar
    Elite Ratio:    1.17 - 0/2/12
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This is about a woman I saw in the hospital.

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    dotsDark Addictiondots

    Dainty build.
    Frizzy chestnut hair.
    Weak legs.
    Enormous belly.

    Forty years life experience,
    But no wisdom.
    She does not have enough will power to reverse her bad habit.
    A dangerous obsession.
    A life threatening addiction.
    She fights to survive,
    But risks her life
    Every time she succumbs to the temptation
    Of a happy-go-lucky state
    That the drops of poison give her.
    Still filling herself,
    Her hands begin to tremble
    And she obtains a red complexion.

    Rivers run from innocent eyes.
    The children prepare for their motherís tragic ending.
    She has no chance.
    Limited tomorrows remain.
    No more Sunday soccer games,
    Or trips to Brookfield Zoo.
    No more bedtime stories
    Filled with fairies and distant lands,
    Or nighttime kisses,
    Gentle on silky foreheads.

    No more opportunities to teach
    Naive children right from wrong.
    Too bad the four youths couldnít learn by example.
    Their mother was no mentor.
    She will have no time to fix her mistakes.
    The wound will remain open,
    Bloody and deep.
    If only there was a price on time.
    You watch your kids
    Hoping that they will be saved.
    Untouched by the toxic substance that killed you.
    Praying that they will stay pure of it till 21,
    And that it wonít be an outlet for them
    Like it was for you.

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      I really enjoyed this poem some what reminds me of my life. but besides that it was a nice observation of the woman and i reaaly enjoyed the lines
    Rivers run from innocent eyes.
    The children prepare for their motherís tragic ending.
    She has no chance.
    Limited tomorrows remain.
    and the last 2 lines ended the poem perfectly
    great job
    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by ROSHAY9992000 | [ Reply to This ]

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