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    dots Submission Name: Little Miss Perfectdots
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    Author: camoflage
    ASL Info:    16/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 459/295/71
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 646
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 1000



    Description:
       Just something I wrote a while back. I had been nursing a broken heart, and I wrote this when I had realzied that....It didnt hurt so much anymore, that I was able to move on.


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    dotsLittle Miss Perfectdots
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    Little Miss Perfect
    Sits in her room
    Writing down the thoughts that roam around in her head.

    Little Miss Perfect,
    The prettiest girl around,
    Is also the sweetest girl in town.

    Little Miss Perfect
    Lies in her bed
    Reading her thoughts away.

    Little Miss Perfect
    Smiles at a world
    That she canít find her place in.

    Little Miss Perfect
    Writes all her thoughts away
    Looking down disdainfully on the tear smudged ink.

    Little Miss Perfect
    Isnít so perfect at all
    Sheís been shattered once before.

    But Little Miss Perfect
    Has picked the broken pieces of her soul up off the ground
    And taped them together again.

    Little Miss Perfect
    Is letting go
    And is moving on.

    Little Miss Perfect
    Is finally free
    To be
    Little Miss Perfect
    Once again.




    Submitted on 2006-04-19 14:38:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This one is sad, sweet, and honest. But not brutally so.
    I happen to like the repetition of 'Little Miss Perfect', so keep it. ^_^


    ~Birdie~
    | Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by MaeBirdie | [ Reply to This ]
      Savie i have commented on this one before but on the instant messanger but i will say it again. It's sad but i shows good emotion it has a little bit of a secret message hidden in the words. But my favorite part would have to be:
    "But Little Miss Perfect
    Has picked the broken pieces of her soul up off the ground
    And taped them together again."
    Because both you and me have had to do that before and i just done taping mine back together and i can be happy for once, again.
    ~Crescent~
    | Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by Crescent | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this. I would suggest however that you maybe fix your flow and not repeat Little Ms Perfect in every stanza. I liked the fourth and fifth stanzas the most. Overall, this was good.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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