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    dots Submission Name: A Language I Can't Readdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I found the first few lines of this in a notebook last night and finished it. I'd started writing it in December, so that's why it's untimely. I suppose this is partially inspired by "Ask" by The Smiths: "Nature is a laguage/ Can't you read?"

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    dotsA Language I Can't Readdots

    Black tree trunks,
    swipes from a calligrapher's hand
    scatter the barren forest.
    I ponder the meaning of these characters,
    try to understand this language
    that all see, but few read,
    and no one ever truly comprehends .

    Submitted on 2006-04-20 03:40:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i see the barren forest as the white page..and the black trees as words filling that forest...but so densely the speaker just can't understand the meanings...

    i seem to walk in that forest a lot...

    i think many of us write with subconscious meanings...and often that lets our readers walk through the same forest and see different trees...
    that walk is good...just as good an exercise as the walker who is going straight from point A to point B...because there is certainty in the step...

    and the trees don't lie...

    | Posted on 2011-05-26 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I think it could be a little bit longer and make it stand out a little bit more I dont really understand what you are trying to say about this language in the poem

    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by inlove2009 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Amy,

    this reminds me of W.S. Merwin:

    "I am trying to read what the poplars are writing in the wind"

    It gives us a beautiful image that we might find as we fly like birds.
    Maybe the language is just that we're loved, but that would be where my mind goes every time..

    It's hard to fathom how much something so simple might have been planned, as I said, the bigger picture. Lovely work, nice to see that you're writing,

    Love and hugs too,

    | Posted on 2006-04-29 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Blackness and barren. This seems to have a feel of emotional emptiness/sadness/death. The picture I get is of lonely tree trunks left in a chopped down forest. They sit there with their insides bare and open, revealing an emptiness. Their limbs (life) having been ripped from them.

    Sorry if this has nothing to do with the meaning. It''s just the first impression I had and it stuck with me.

    Well written. Unique.
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Can't think of anything constructive at the moment.......but I really like this..........we all interpret things in different ways.......and at first sitting we may not understand what is being said.....come back to it later.....It's worth it for the visual aspect alone.Keep smiling.

    | Posted on 2006-06-22 00:00:00 | by going_strong | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the idea that some CAN read the nature-language.... but no one can comphrehend. Also, making the distinction between reading and comprehending... that's very important, i know I always read to comprehend so it baffles me when my classmates don't absrb what they just read @_@ ~Coraz
    | Posted on 2006-05-03 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]
      well this poem is short but effective it conveys the point which i think is shrouded in mystery cause i dont think ur talking about language but perhaps thought or something deeper it could be just me i like the image that u start the poem with the page as a forest full of trees overall a very nice and creative write nice job :D
    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by Shadows Life | [ Reply to This ]
      it's good to see you writing again, Amy.. i like the starkness of this one and could picture the characters on the page, perhaps not knowing what they mean yet trying to understand. kind of like poetry, we all write what we understand and sometimes no one gets it but us.. once again, your minimalism leaves me with things to ponder.. it's great to read you again!

    Tracy makes me crazy sometimes listening to the Smiths over and over again..!

    much love,
    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Hello there Amy I hope things are getting better for you and it is nice to see you writing again.

    ok now on to this write

    I really don't get it and I am sorry for that

    maybe it is about not understanfing poetry for what it is.

    thats the best I van come up with
    again nice to see some new stuff from you

    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the last three lines of this poem as it is punchy and makes the poem.

    It reminds me of poetry itself. Few take the time to appreciate something that you have written, and only you truly understand the meaning of your words. Nature, I would say, differs little.

    Some may think this poem is a little short, but I rather like shorter pieces. It is to the point and doesn't bore you with long, unnecessary stanzas.

    Thanks, great read. :-)
    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by Leila | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminds me of that one person in your life who you can't figure out. The one person whose words you want so badly to understand but you don't...and that one person....the one person you longed to be...understands that person to a T.
    I like the opening of black tree trunks and the imagery of a barren forest. Very interesting piece. It made me think. :) I like it.
    How are you hun?

    Hugs. Take care.

    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]

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