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    dots Submission Name: Suicidal Thoughtsdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       Just reflecting about the time when I wanted to kill myself.
    (Not good)

    Life is precious, yet borrowed, so lets enjoy it to the fullest, and live another tomorrow!

    That's right!
    I thank the Lord today because I'm alive!

    Latin King


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    dotsSuicidal Thoughtsdots
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    As I looked at four blank walls,
    I heard my mother cry,
    I had no life at all,
    And so I was cursing at the sky.

    I had a knife at hand,
    But didn't know what to do,
    I was not yet a man,
    But I knew no one could fit my shoes.

    I thought about hanging myself,
    Or slicing my throat,
    Shooting my brains out was something else,
    But I knew there was hope.

    Ideas ran wild in my mind,
    I played them once again,
    I was running out of time,
    Deep inside I knew I ran out of friends.

    Starring at the mirror,
    I saw death's reflection,
    I knew my pain was real,
    So strap me down,
    And give me life's lethal injection.

    Many times I wished I died,
    There's no denying the facts,
    Even though I can no longer cry,
    Suicidal thoughts used to pile and stack.

    I hated these suicidal thoughts,
    But I thank God,
    Because It all came to a stop.

    Now pay attention,
    Because what I write is really true,
    So my advice to you,
    Is to think carefully,
    About what you're about to do.






    Submitted on 2004-05-07 20:48:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, it's powerfull, and it makes me think twice about everything, and think things thru..thanks for the read.
    -camoflage
    p.s.just lettin' you know you may have helped out someone with this.
    | Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by camoflage | [ Reply to This ]
      im SO glad you didnt go through withany of your plans... i too have been hell suicidal and yeah... its so deceptive. a boy i loved killed himself last week and yeah i dont know... i just dont think ppl realise the finality of suicide... they want the pain to be gone but they dont think about everything else being gone too... im SO glad your still alive and i thank god too!
    | Posted on 2004-05-08 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      VERY POWERFUL. I REALLY LIKED THIS AND THANK YOU FOR SHARING THIS. IT TAKES ANYTHING TO MAKE A PERSON GO OVER THAT THIN RED LINE IN THEIR MIND. MAYBE READING THIS POEM MIGHT BE THE KEY TO STOP SOMEONE FROM KILLING THEIRSELF. MY 5TH GRADE TEACH TOLD A STORY BOUT THIS GUY SHE KNEW AND HE WAS ABOUT TO KILL HIMSELF. HE WAS IN A GUN STORE ABOUT TO PURCHASE SOME BULLETS AND HE TOOK OUT HIS WALLET AND FOUND A PIECE OF PAPER THAT WAS FROM GRADESCHOOL AND THERE WAS A WHOLE BUNCH OF THINGS ON THERE ABOUT HIM FROM HIS CLASSMATES AND FRIENDS, NICE COMMENTS. SO MAYBE THIS WILL HELP SOMEBODY, VERY BEAUTIFUL POEM
    | Posted on 2004-05-07 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      Wowsa, incredible, i opted towards pils, but couldn't bring myself to swallow them, guess I hadn't the will power, and I'm glad of it now. I thought about the wrists, but I hate the sight of blod, which is odd for one with those thoughts. But ah well, I am over them now, if you want to see my thoughts on the matter, look at "My friends have left me" its about that time in my life... On the Outside was written somewhat befor, and then the last of it after...excellent write. ~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2004-05-07 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is very enfluencing to give many of the ones who are coming to that dark end of there lives some wisdome...I admire that...The poem itself was good too...I won't say much about the suicide, I've been there, I don't really want to talk about it, but anyway...I loved that line where you said you looked into a mirror and you saw deaths reflection...Very creative...
    | Posted on 2004-05-09 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]


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