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    dots Submission Name: Am I Staring Into the Airdots
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    Author: Lavender
    ASL Info:    20/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 101/125/59
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Misc/
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       I dunno. Just tell me what you think. Be honest.


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    dotsAm I Staring Into the Airdots
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    I'm standing here
    With no one by my side
    You're standing there
    With the reflection of me in your eyes

    Maybe you know
    Something I don't
    Maybe you're not
    Even there and
    I'm just staring
    Into the air

    You look at me
    And I look down
    I look at you
    And then I frown
    because now

    I'm standing here
    With people by my side
    You aren't there
    So was what I saw a trick of my eyes?

    Maybe you knew
    Something I won't
    Maybe you were
    Standing there and
    I wasn't just staring
    Into the air




    Submitted on 2006-04-20 09:30:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I lke the idea of the poem. BUt you have to bring more something to it. I am not sure what though.
    I'm standing here
    With no one by my side
    You're standing there
    With the reflection of me in your eyes


    I stand here alone
    surounded by air and nothingness.
    I see you there
    just out of reach
    with me reflected in your eyes.

    What do you think?
    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]


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