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    dots Submission Name: Gravediggerdots
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    Author: BreakAndFall
    ASL Info:    18/f/mo
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 115/153/59
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 799
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 341



    Description:
       This poem is VERY VERY symbolic, and every line had deep hidden meaning. If you can't understand it and would like you, message me, I'll explain it. but I really dont want to write it all out here if no one wants to know.


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    dotsGravediggerdots
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    Engraved upon a lone headstone
    One tiny word, and one alone
    "Baby" was all the stone declared
    The ground o'er turned, the coffin bared
    Laying open upon the ground
    And nowhere near was the body found
    By nothing was the gravedigger betrayed
    They desecrated the place she was laid




    Submitted on 2006-04-20 09:42:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Nice little poem. I like the metaphor. I think you should change the following:

    The ground overturned,
    the coffin laying open
    And nowhere near was her body found

    but it's your work and your choice (you know what they say about free advice).


    Peace,

    Joe
    | Posted on 2006-04-21 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Thats an interesting poem. It must be symbolic, its hard to understand what really happened. I'd like to know what happened, or the story behind it, because it was interesting. It was short, but it seems like it tells a whole story in those few lines.
    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by Dylan fan | [ Reply to This ]


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