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    dots Submission Name: Everything and Nothingdots
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    Author: BreakAndFall
    ASL Info:    18/f/mo
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 115/153/59
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 932
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 473



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    dotsEverything and Nothingdots
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    Counting the hours, minutes, days, months
    Wishing on stars, lucky pennies, clovers
    Weeping for us, you, me, love
    Sleeping to dream, be with you
    Thinking all day, night, rain, snow

    Everything in life constantly reminds me of you
    Nothing will break the chain we created to hold us

    Holding tightly to your hand
    Kissing you, savoring all
    Smiling up at blue eyes
    Loving you, never leave again




    Submitted on 2006-04-20 09:54:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really loved this because it was simple, and short.
    Very to the point and very very loving.
    I wish I could just write something like that... but don't we all..

    this is my favorite part:

    Everything in life constantly reminds me of you
    Nothing will break the chain we created to hold us


    That happens to me all the time. I can never actually forget the one I love, even if I tried, and I did at one point.. but I guess I'm glad I couldn't do it.

    keep writing.

    Wisdom
    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by darkwisdom623 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like alot of aspects in this poem but u really could make it alot better by workig on the form and presentation a little bit u have some original ideas in there and some nice images but if u just pay a little more attention to the way u present the poem im sure ull have a great piece but then again thats just my opinion nice effort :)
    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by Shadows Life | [ Reply to This ]


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