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    dots Submission Name: Elite Pussdots
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    Author: Raven_TheWolf
    ASL Info:    16/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.95 - 128/128/63
    Words: 265
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 173
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1713



    Description:
       The love of a pet is the best love of all. They care unconditionally, give them a moment of your time and they love you eternally. All that they ask for in return is food, shelter and love back.


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    dotsElite Pussdots
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    She assaults me in darkness;
    Attacking my poor, abused hand.
    Staring at me through piercing blue peepers;
    Only because she knows I won't repremand.

    Stroking the woman perched on my lap,
    Thoroughly enjoying her evident pleasure.
    She closes her eyes for her afternoon nap,
    Her chocolate fur, radiating in sunlight.
    When I stop stroking her, she gives me a tap.

    Peering out the window, watching winged creatures;
    That is her definition of a nice afternoon.
    Watching the scaly-tailed furball before dinner,
    Licking her lips while lying by the moon;
    She savours the simple joys of life.

    While some would call our relationship odd,
    We think of it as all that we know.
    We do not argue over the exhistance of God,
    We do not have to make time for eachother,
    Nor do we fight over a young man named Todd.

    When the pounding in my head clears;
    The jingle of a little bell soothes my mind.
    While I am insecure and have many fears;
    A petite form is there for comfort,
    She kisses me with her sandpaper tongue.
    During bad times, her sweet love appears.

    While she attacks my feet from inside of my sheets,
    When she wakes me up in the middle of the night,
    Whether she is stealing the bag of bread or her treats,
    She is still the best friend anybody could ask for.
    Not just a friend, companion of only Elite's.

    Of a virgin mind and light origin;
    Of curiosity and love for all;
    Holding only innocence within;
    She is extraordinaty; big or small.




    Submitted on 2006-04-20 10:35:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ok I don't think there is any
    thing we can do with this one
    it just is what it is, oh sure you
    could meter it so every line has
    the same number of feet and play
    around with it so all the stanzas
    come out with the same rhyme
    scheme and number of lines,
    but, its so cute just the way it is
    if we start tinkering we might
    ruin it. As far as nitpicking goes

    We do not argue over the exhistance of God
    this line has a spelling error

    We do not have to make time for eachother,
    this line has a spacing error

    and that's it all I see to nitpick about
    now I wrote a poem about cats
    and this reminded me, so I am going
    to post it, just in the interest of fair play
    and to tell the rest of the story, also
    I might mention here, you are fun
    to play with, and I hope you don't mind
    being teased a little


    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]



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