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    dots Submission Name: my depressiondots

    Author: WhErEaMi
    ASL Info:    16/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 35/38/24
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsmy depressiondots

    Death is something that we all dread,
    We lie thinking about it alone in our bed
    just the thought of it brings us to tears,
    Will we one day have to face up to our fears
    people thinkin i say this for sympathy,
    but i truly feel that people do not love me,
    should i take my life away,
    or should i wait for that day,
    i should tie the rope, tie it tight,
    just make sure i do it right,
    take the blade across my wrists,
    i really know i wont be missed,
    donít think and try to figure out why,
    just remember,at my funeral,
    i told you not to cry.

    Submitted on 2006-04-20 13:43:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a nice, well expressed poem, that touches on a feeling and state of mind that I'm sure we all have experienced at some point or other.

    I don't mean to lecture you, so please don't take this amiss, but if you are really feeling this way, you could perhaps look at it differently, and use the fact that no-one seems to care about you to stop looking around you for what you need, but look inside youself and in the seeming isolation, find out more about yourself in this (somewhat enforced) introverted state.

    pardon my loquacity please!
    and keep writing..
    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]

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