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    dots Submission Name: Cruelty Escaped (In the arms of Another)dots

    Author: sageeriol
    ASL Info:    23/male/GA.
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 314/322/106
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I love her and she fixed my world.

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    dotsCruelty Escaped (In the arms of Another)dots

    War rules this world.
    Hate rules the souls of man.
    The screams of the dead,
    And the calls of the dying
    Match step for step
    Word for word
    The tears of the crying.
    In the middle of it all
    Time stops.
    A kiss is given,
    And received.
    A love purifies two souls.
    Lost is the past.
    Discovered is a future.
    Solace comes,
    And washes the pain
    Into oblivion.
    Fanning the dying embers
    Into grand flames.
    They hold onto eachother,
    And hide in eachother's arms.
    Wonderous is their love.
    Eternal is their passion.

    Submitted on 2006-04-20 13:45:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Punctuation! YAY.
    The contrast in this is great, from pain and anguish to the joy found in your lovers arms…it is greatness.
    Basically, I love you babe
    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by Brandiness | [ Reply to This ]
      This is another really good write from you. I would split this poem perhaps into two or three stanza's

    It will add to the flow and give more meaning to the poem

    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by sunraybutterfly | [ Reply to This ]

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