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    dots Submission Name: Sweep me off my feet---dots

    Author: camoflage
    ASL Info:    16/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 459/295/71
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 787
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Eh, I think this is rather bad, but it's the first thing I have written in quite a while. Hopefully, I'll be able to get back into the groove pretty soon. Thoughts, and comments welcome.

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    dotsSweep me off my feet---dots

    My heart skips a beat.
    My vision is blurry
    And my knees are weak.

    I canít believe all the things you do to me
    And all you have to do is be in proximity
    You kiss me on the cheek
    You tell me you love me,
    And the pattern starts all over again.

    My heart skips a beat.
    My throat goes dry
    And I canít speak.

    You look at me with eyes so blue
    It feels like Iím floating
    And it doesnít hurt when I hit the ground.
    An experience so new.
    Your kiss, so sweet,
    It knocks me off my feet.

    My heart skips a beat.
    Thereís tears in my eyes
    So I canít see.

    Hold me tight,
    Wrap your arms around me.
    Itís curious,
    Your gentle kiss must be
    Because it does this to me:

    My heart skips a beat.
    My love for you,
    Itís so deep so true.

    You smile at me,
    And sweep me off my feet all over again.

    Submitted on 2006-04-20 15:33:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      aw cute :3 I dunno, I usually don't like it when people try to say brown eyes are romantic but I guess that's jst me... *sucker for blue* <3 Coraz
    | Posted on 2006-06-16 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]
      Thats sweet i know how you feel (because of the ex)(you know who) but it was good.
    My favorite part is:
    "I canít believe all the things you do to me
    And all you have to do is be in proximity
    You kiss me on the cheek
    You tell me you love me,
    And the pattern starts all over again."
    it has rhyme but not enough to make it feel pushed and not free verse so it appealing to everybody. But good write and keep writing.
    ~Kat~ ~Crescent~

    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by Crescent | [ Reply to This ]

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