I don't know what you were getting at, but you sure made me hungry. lol. I love fish and chips though. Your flow was good and so was the imagery. I just loved the way this had a easy flow to it. Like a coffee shop feel. Nice, warm and comfortable. Great work.
to me, you've woven up a new recipe and the trick is to find one's own theme if that's needed or just to enjoy. Either way, it's a savvy write and you could recite it to many a sailor who lands on your shores.
maybe even take out them out for a bite! I like the inventive quality and direct style, quite proper mum! Thanks for sharing,
Not sure exactly what this is about, but I do like it. The wordplay here and internal rhyme is quitte good. I'd like to say I get it but I don't (no, don't explain either - that'll just make me feel stupid ). Anyway, only change I would think about is 'whilst' - that didn't seem to fit for me. It's your work, but that's just me 2 cents.
Very witty. Intellegent etc. I like the plays on words. Please tell me thought went into this one?? Also, I'm sure you've heard the quote, "today's news wraps tomorrow's fish and chips"? I liked it a lot. Is there a reason stanza line length decreases? I don't know what that added to it, maybe just signified the changes in direction of the poem. A perfect specimen of intellegent penmanship. I think I've found a favourite!
this is very cool and different. it made me hungry for fish 'n chips! i think you mean "taters" instead of "tatters"...? very clever write! great play on words all wrapped up in, well, yesterday's news!! great job on this one.