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Love


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 296
Class/Type: Lyrics /Love
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iight this is a rap haha one of the two i'm working on this is the first verse tell me what u think.


Love



((verse one))
love can make u or break u
makes me wonder why i even wanna date you
sometimes i hate you
wish u would go away..nah i'm playin
just wish you would listen to the words i'm sayin
you was neva true to me i was always true to u
playin me like i was a fucking flute
i could neva understand how u
would wanna fuck something so good
7 1/2 years down the drain
'cause you couldn't control your morning wood
I hope she leave ya ass, u neva did deserver her
i was worser, but neva again will i hurt a friend
ova u so i can breath again
take into consideration i can see again
wit u i was blinded
never mind it i was young and naive
back porch smoking weed again
to give the pain away
i should've left a long time ago but i stayed
and i payed for everytime i fucked wit u
i regret it
messed up something so good i ain't get it
he loved my ass i ain't get it i ain't see it
to young and so concieted got to let it go
to bad my words my confessions i gotta let it flow
Maybe then i can let it go
maybe then he can forgive me
he maybe neva gonna get back wit me
Just know i love ya man i ain't playin
probally wouldn't have been betta with me stayin
for a second chance i'm prayin

((chours))
Love is so blind
shouldn't have cheated
didn't believe that you would leave
I shouldn've learned to let pain go
now i know
what it's like to be alone
just know i miss you baby
i miss you...




Submitted on 2006-04-20 16:46:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this one was really good. i guess u don't wanna be a player no more. yeah i really don't like cheaters and it seems that u've learned ur lesson. just kidding. i'm sorry u and this guy can't get back together. who knows...maybe it'll all work out
| Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  Your flow was GOOOD, and your rhymes were simple. Your emotion was conveyed nicely.
"would wanna [censored] something so good
7 1/2 years down the drain
'cause you couldn't control your morning wood"

i like those lines. These were good rap lyrics overall. You told it like a story. IT was a good read.
| Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
  ay girl, whats good, I like this, its one of the better things I've read of yours, I like how you set [censored] up and all that...I want you to read my
"forever?" I want to know what you think about that [censored] I means alot to me though so if you don't like it dont go too hard on it, you know?
| Posted on 2006-06-10 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
  hah fucking flute, classic. Kind of an anti-player rap. I payed for every time I fucked wit u. It switches moods a lot, and doesnt feel as aggressive as most raps I hear. See to me rap is crazy rims on big cars,pimping, being shot 20 times on the street, and talking about the hard life in an urban area. I'm clueless.

The beginning was fun because it showed personality, but the chorus is all soft a mushy as a background.
| Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by bashscript | [ Reply to This ]


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