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Other Species


Author: Rokhal
ASL Info:    21, f, USA NW
Elite Ratio:    8 - 85 /71 /18
Words: 219
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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This predates Monsters and Alien Dream---it's 2004---and it's got about the same theme.
Please tell me if you can't tell what's going on, and how you interpret the last part, unless it doesn't make sense.
If it's not clear (if you can't until you read the top part, please let me know so I can fix it), this is about a scientist-type showing off a Giger's Alien.


Other Species



Feel its fine skin. Put your hand on it.
I have a good hold, it won’t move. Feel
the soft fine membrane, the tracheal tubes.
Feel its pulse—subtle,
yet powerful—steady, unlike ours. No proper heart,
but many valves, so elegant.
Here—
I have it, it won’t move.
The mouths—come along, girl, show me
see.
The inner mouth
is all muscle and spring-bow—like cartilage—
fired by the head.
Harder than a horse kicks, it can brace against the blow.
Good girl.
The teeth,
the teeth—
we cannot find how it grows its teeth. They are mineral.
Feel them.
Soft curving arc of metal,
so beautiful, a mathematical curve.
Mathematical creature.
You see the beauty?
I suppose
you must first learn to cradle,
like the face of a child,
the fresh-drawn heart of a cow, watch it beat air,
the fibers tugging beneath the tenuous pericardium,
and kneel, with moist, uplifted hands,
under the slow light,
the blind light, where there is no light or darkness
for the thousand memories
in the curved ice mind.







Submitted on 2006-04-20 22:06:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I am really sorry but I am not sure if I
Can give you an unbiased review, you see
This is one of my favorite poems. I just
Don’t see myself as capable of looking at
It objectively. Therefore how about I just
Enumerate its virtues! Well first as I caress
It with my eyes I am reminded of a star ship’s
First shift into hyper-drive (fits the alien theme too)
Then as my will is bent to the compel of your voice.
I move my hand down the sleek slide of it,
I am enthralled by the animus of its pulse
(purely from a psychological perspective of course)
And when you show me the inner mouth, rapture.
I am overwhelmed by the power, the teeth
I shiver to think what that curving arc of
Metal might do to my soft sensitive flesh.
Logically of course I know I am safe, and
That you are in full control of the experience.
But still I shudder. And as you draw my
Captive mind into the realm where pure
knowledge is worshiped, I enter into a state
of transcendent wonder( I could go on to
describe this state but I would be here all
night and that I can not do, I have to go
to work soon.) I will just say it’s a great
ending, you rock! I had to put that in there.
And honestly you rock, I have read some
Of your other poems, You are very creative
And original (at least I am not familiar
With anyone else who writes like you)
So unless you shoo me away I will be pestering
You with a few more reviews, however my
Time is limited so I shall not be stalking you.
I doubt I would have the time to live up to
The commitment, but I want to stalk you
Really I do, I think you deserve to be stalked.
Well I have to run, hey did I say it , you rock.
DaleP



| Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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