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    dots Submission Name: Shieldeddots
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    Author: ellesmera
    ASL Info:    18. Female. England
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 43/263/115
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 764
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 679



    Description:
       ummmmm random? sufficating, the truth?


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    dotsShieldeddots
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    I`m all alone;
    running through the streets:
    the sky seems;
    to fall at my feet,
    I`m screaming in to the night,
    waiting;
    for someone,
    to here my plight.

    I`m in the darkness,
    no one is home,
    I waiting,
    for you.........
    to save me,
    from this eternal happiness,
    this sufficating joy,
    let me breathe,
    a solem breath again;
    this is not the real world.


    I'm bieng shielded,
    shielded,
    from the truths,
    and the pains,
    and the falls,
    and the gains;
    let me breathe,
    again.........




    Submitted on 2006-04-21 06:01:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i have an over protective mom for a while she shilded me really bad but it was only up until i was like 9
    i know this guy thats about 14 who has been shilded by his mom all his life
    she let him do whatever he wants so he thought that was reality and that he was better than anybody else
    about 2 months ago reality kicked him in the face when his parrents got devorced and his dad wont baby him like his mom
    he is learning manners bks he is learning what reality really isbut it will still effect him the rest of his life
    he still has an inability to socalize
    he dont know how to treat other people
    he is so confused
    you should break away from it
    simply knowing that their is a world beyond that shield is all it takes
    | Posted on 2006-04-21 00:00:00 | by Dark Romeo89 | [ Reply to This ]


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