Between The Lines
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I have worked hard to polish this but am not sure if it is still ready to be called a final piece. though alot of the errors in the poem are dilberate if you see anything that still needs to be corrected please point it out. any help or advice now will do for me!
slightly tweaked by chell's recommendation. thanks!
slightly tweaked by chell's recommendation. thanks!
Between The Lines
[I am a torn page from a spiral notebook; ) [Jagged edges ) [And sloppy. I am an abbreviation, a mispeling, an error A @!*# curse in symbols. I am the silent "k" in known And the "f" in phenomenon; A swift erasure, lost forever, Question mark me? I am the implied, The innuendo too obscure to be understood, The lengthy epigram. I am the etc., what's next? nothing maybe… A paradox, a pseudonym, A synonym for mistake. A coffee stain, A curled corner that refuses to straighten. I am the ink that bleeds through, or the ink that fades at mid-page Find… me… between… words, the s p a c e s, the gaps , the emptiness. I am a fold, Unfold, And folded again. The pause after a period. The exasperated gasp- After a run on sentence, Crumble me and watch Crease veins stretch over me. I am the passage written when you were blue. Come back to me and wonder, "How could I have written this?" T/e/a/r and rip me! I will flutter in pieces somewhere sad, Because I am the message that is forgotten. Read between the lines. |
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| this is quite ingenious... the language well-played---the pause after the period...the forgotten silent letter... but if you read between the lines...i am more important than you think...and i will be remembered... maybe by that semi-colon... :) can't suggest changes..i like this as is... definitely my amusement for the day! thank you...now i shall go teach my English composition class with a slight smile. jacob | Posted on 2011-03-31 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ] | Your a damn good writer Sindy!!! I am suprized I have never seen you on here before??? This was really good and it made me laugh. Thanks for sharring. | Kelley Frost | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ] | Hi, | Great write, going to a favorites, makes you think, liked the idea behind it, so what are you then?, the space, the blankness of purpose, or the energy behind the write or the actual words or meaning. Kind regards Eric | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by bornx2000 | [ Reply to This ] | |  I LOVE THIS!!! I truly love this, it's the most thoughtful thing that I have ever read! It's so deep, and you gave life to the things that most people don't understand have life. WORDS, PUNCTUATION!! I truly, honestly, completely love this. Definitely adding it to my favorites.Blessings, ~Azura* | Posted on 2007-01-31 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ] | this is great! i'm glad i stumbled upon it this evening.. i love all your descriptions. all i can say is, wow, this is me! | this is going in my faves. very unique and thought-provoking. wonderful work. peace, ~Cat | Posted on 2007-01-18 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ] | Wow!! excellent job on this. It has so much feeling and it is taken into a new view. I love how you used writing to display your feelings. I was also impressed with how many usages you could find inwritting to convey your meaning. This was amazing i initialy thought this was going to be just some normal type of writting fromthe title and was caught off gaurd at how well you used the english language, well written languge to convey meaning in a new way. Great work on this! | | Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by FLHgg | [ Reply to This ] | This could be a poem about my life. I usually feel like the " 'f' in phenomenon" myself. This is definately going in my favorites. | Kyle | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by owlman23 | [ Reply to This ] | Sindy, What a joy to see your poem displayed for the world wide web to read and appreciate. Ever since you first read it to me in your apartment i have fallen in love with its eloquence and superb craft! I love this poem and would love to have a framed copy hanging in my office one day! | Love Ya ~Alexander | Posted on 2006-06-01 00:00:00 | by Alexander Blue | [ Reply to This ] | I think I won't be able to tell you something that others havent said allready, | I, too, love how you played with punctuation, spaces.. etc. Like the action that goes with the words. I must say t that I think jetstream candy had a nice idea |